Kaya and Dylan B's Amazing Writing

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Kaya and Dylan B from Mrs Yollis Class Writing

This week we've been looking at narrative writing from a pair of students from Mrs Yollis class in the United States of America.  It features a dog called Buck, who is Mrs Yollis dog! We started by looking at their writing, sharing it and then completing the task of finishing the story! Not only that but when we finished our version of the story we shared it back to Mrs Yollis and she commented on our students work.

When Mrs Yollis was commenting 'live' on our students work we were amazed because we realised that we were a day ahead of the United States of America and while it was Wednesday midday here in New Zealand it was Tuesday afternoon at the same time in the USA.

It was a great example for our students to read a narrative from other students from another part of the world.  We haven't finished yet.  We are creating a wall display featuring Mrs Yollis and her students work to put on display and help us improve our writing.  Thank you Kaya, Dylan B, Mrs Yollis and all the students in your amazing classroom.  You can click on the link to the blog here.

The Gingerbread Mission: Part Two

The Gingerbread Mission - Part Two.

Their gingerbread house came to life and turned into a monster.   Nolan said “this was not in the recipe”.  “I kinda used come to life food in it as the secret ingredient” said Elie.  Nolan sighed “look” said Elie “its getting away”.   Nolan and Elie ran after it “it’s heading into the baking competition!”  They saw it eating all the food and getting bigger “that thing has lots of teeth said Nolan.   “This gives me an idea” said Elie “let’s eat it” and so they gobbled the monster up “well we may not win but we did have a good snack” said Nolan “what are you talking about” said the judge “you kicked the monsters butt” “you totally win the prize.  “Hooray” said Nolan and Elie

By Ryan Room Three.

Mrs Yollis and her class of students in the USA have been creating some amazing examples of narrative writing. This inspired our students in New Zealand to come up with an ending to their work this is Ryan example.

Gingerbread Mission - Nolan and Elie Global Work!

Today in class here in New Zealand we spent time looking at a piece of writing - nothing unusual in that however we were looking at a story written by two students in Mrs Yollis classroom in the USA, Nolan and Elie.    We loved reading their writing in class - we were all given a copy of their writing, we shared it to every student and converted it to a google doc.  

We then created a plan for our writing - the story by Nolan and Elie was left at a cliffhanger and our challenge was to end it! When we created the Google Doc we shared it with Mr Webb and also Mrs Yollis.  This created a surprise for our students, because while it was Monday mid-day here in New Zealand, it was Sunday afternoon in California and Mrs Yollis was online and started editing our work.   You can read the original post by the students from Mrs Yollis classroom here and we will be posting our work in the coming days.

Aimee's Writing Example from England

We're always looking for fantastic examples of students work to use in class. One piece of writing that we found the other day came from Aimee in England. Its a piece of narrative writing describing events during the Blitz in London. It created a fantastic discussion with students in Room Three in Auroa about feelings and how it would have been different during this time. We looked at the language that Aimee had used and loved the experience.  You can click on this link to her writing here.