Wednesday, 1 March 2017

The Gingerbread Mission: Part Two

The Gingerbread Mission - Part Two.
Their gingerbread house came to life and turned into a monster.   Nolan said “this was not in the recipe”.  “I kinda used come to life food in it as the secret ingredient” said Elie.  Nolan sighed “look” said Elie “its getting away”.   Nolan and Elie ran after it “it’s heading into the baking competition!”  They saw it eating all the food and getting bigger “that thing has lots of teeth said Nolan.   “This gives me an idea” said Elie “let’s eat it” and so they gobbled the monster up “well we may not win but we did have a good snack” said Nolan “what are you talking about” said the judge “you kicked the monsters butt” “you totally win the prize.  “Hooray” said Nolan and Elie

By Ryan Room Three.

Mrs Yollis and her class of students in the USA have been creating some amazing examples of narrative writing. This inspired our students in New Zealand to come up with an ending to their work this is Ryan example.


  1. Allie, Josh, Payden2 March 2017 at 09:20

    Dear Ryan,

    We are from Mrs. Yollis class, and we just read your post on your blog.

    We loved your story because it was very creative. We like how you used a lot of dialogue between Nolan and Elie.

    Payden’s favorite part was when Elie said, “I used a Come-to-life ingredient in the formula.”

    Josh loved when the both devoured the gingerbread house.

    Allie, enjoyed when the monster was running to the competition. I could picture that in my head.

    Thanks for a great story!

    Allie, Josh, and Payden
    Mrs. Yollis’ students in Los Angeles

  2. Elie and Nolan2 March 2017 at 09:23

    Dear Ryan,

    We are the writers of the Gingerbread Mission, Nolan and Elie.

    We loved your ending to our story. It was fantastic! Your idea of the house coming to life was unique. Well, even though I, Elie, put the come-to-life food in the gingerbread, I thought that it was very clever.

    We are honored to see someone put all that time and dedication into making a great ending to our story.

    We think you are a very creative boy and used funny actions in your story. I, Nolan, like how you said we gobbled the house down.

    If you were to write a story, what would it be about?

    Your friends,
    Elie and Nolan
    Mrs. Yollis' students
    Los Angeles, California

  3. Ariana, Leor, Amanda, Enzo, and Tre2 March 2017 at 09:25

    Dear Ryan,

    We really liked your dialogue! In addition, the story idea was very clever. A monster that came alive was a phenomenal idea! Amanda, Ariana and Tre loved the idea of Elie and Nolan eating the gingerbread house. Enzo and Leor liked when the gingerbread monster ate all the other houses.

    If you made your own beginning of the story, what would you write?

    Your new friends,
    Ariana, Leor, Amanda, Enzo, and Tre

  4. Dear Ryan,

    My name is Rose and I am from Mrs. Yollis' Class. I read your Ginger Bread Mission ending. In my opinion that is the best ending in the universe for two reasons. One reason is because you explained how the monster looks, that made me imagine a movie going in my head.

    The second reason is how you made the monster come to life. I think your story is so exiting that I kept reading it over and over again.

    Also, in my head the monster looks like its teeth are colorful gumdrops. The teeth are where the door is, the monster's eyes are the windows, and the monster even has a hat which is the basement part of the house.

    What does the monster look like in your head?

    Your blogging buddy,

  5. Thank you all for your wonderful comments - Ryan is going to be thrilled!
    Mr Webb